Jun 22, 2025
This was fantastic! What a fun first chapter. 😀❤️ I really enjoyed this beginning and loved how you wrote both characters.
‘I addressed him appropriately - “Morning, Okita. You suck.” Hahaha. That felt such like a student thing to do. Very good characterization. 😆
What’s Elden Circle? A game? A was a bit confused who he was talking to and what that was about and if it was important.
Lol his internal dialogue was super funny. I especially loved when he is calling the calligraphy president -sama and god and then in a perfectly neutral voice is like oh, I guess. Nbd.
I really like how you write Sakanou-senpai. She really gives off the tsundere older girl charm. But that ending with her showing a cute side was adorable.
Lastly, I thought you did a good job with the ending hook to keep the readers going. 👍
Can't wait to read more about how Kyotaro will win over senpai's heart and what mess he will cause along the way. 😜❤️
