Jul 17, 2025
After reading five chapters (and chapter 0), I can confidently say your writing style and plot is great. It’s easy to understand and engaging.
I particularly like the conversations between the protagonist and 15.
My two critiques would be:
1) The Isekai element seems to be coming in a little late;
2) (Almost) all dialogue has tags before or after it. Perhaps try to write some dialogue without tags, so conversations flow a bit better.
