Dec 30, 2025
The writing is……… I could kindly say unentertaining. It is imprecise, have unnecessary words and metaphors. And you, the writer, didn't even focus the brick and straight to the country itself.
I know vagueness is a good way to create terror… However, it is terrible and only work if the other details are extremely precise and compress with tight and long sentences contrasting with eachother.\\\
And again, there's way too much telling than showing. I'm fine with writers telling us straight up about the emotions, that's great, that's fine, people should do it time to time. However, showing things/action (like a man batting his brows, a woman tapping against her forehead, et cetera) can help with the terror and let the readers precisely visualise what to expect.\\\
I'm fine with the mysterious figure, I'm fine with the phonetics of the text… I immensely dislike the dialogue of this First Chapter. It is on the nose, and in spite of the narrator saying that it is an enigma and whatever convuluted thing, the characters… know about it. The… I can't really explain how much I despise this. Nonetheless, I am going to continue writing.