Oct 14, 2025

A story about chaotic Isekai heros with unreliable narrator and comedic tone is already gold .
' it's baking the landscape!' and ' my enemy is...bread' is an award winning for best punchline in 2025 🤣.
Loving the story so far and the comedy is peak.
Not gonna lie , that briefcase sounds like the perfect sidekick . I'm starting to wish I had one 😁

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Oct 10, 2025

I want to start with a greeting to you dear follow author.
I remember seeing your story on Scrabble hub and thinking it seems interesting especially with the horror genre and the unreliable narrator added to it made it a perfect match for the type of story I prefer.
I'm happy to see that you are posting on honey feed now as I remember thinking you're being serious with your story from what I read on your profile on Scrabble hub .
I held myself from commenting until this chapter because I felt there's something being cooked and this chapter affirmed that because I could tell you seem to give attention for build up - and I think that's exactly the right approach for stories like yours- but sadly that might not pay off well in web novels where people thrive on fast engagement.
I liked the few minor changes in awareness of rythem that you made in this chapter and I think you should keep that as it gives horror and psychological stories a sharp edge in terms of catching the attention of the reader. If I may suggest one more thing is to consider using italic cus it feels criminal almost to miss such an opportunity especially with horror where you can emphasize the wrongness vibe and the MC inner thoughts.
I feel like I could ramble a lot more but I don't want to write an essay in comment section 😅 and will just say that it was a really fortunate to runs to your story again and I hope you keep up the good work with your story because I really think it has potentials and hope to see more of it in the future ❤️

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Oct 08, 2025

To:Adam Ola

Yo! I sent you a friend request on Discord — feel free to share your thoughts there :)

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Oct 08, 2025

To:spicarie

Really glad you enjoyed the story enough to comment and that you liked kyoshin's character , I was starting to doubt myself that I might have not given him enough room to show his madness and mad hatter vibe so you liking him means a lot 😁. Men are all about romance after all— even the corpse ones✌️.
Really appreciate you taking time to read the story and commenting.
I hope you enjoy seeing more future content of this story ❤️

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Oct 01, 2025

While this kind of story isn't something I often read, I enjoyed reading it.
I would say that your writing is pretty good. You have a good rythem building, nice expressions of body language that convey emotions and tension . Very smooth storytelling. Sakura been an artist have a nice kind of sub theme that is going on. It Have some potentials depending if you want to add depth to it.
Wish you the best with your story.

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Sep 23, 2025

Loved the story so far . You have a very nice premise and have quite the potentials. I enjoyed the quality of the prose so far, It's balanced well between explaining without overloading. And the narrative voice is fresh . Loved your use of italic to highlight the inner thoughts of the protagonist, it add more refine to the rythem of the blocks. ' what make good story? ' is a never ending question that every author ask himself. Hope we both find a thread to that answer in your story. Hope to see this content develop more in the future .

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