Sep 23, 2025
Hi Chris. It's your writing buddy Kawaii-san as you call me😆
I like your novel, it's very interesting to read and I'm already waiting for chapter 3😊
Although there could be a few changes that could make your novel better.
Not to be harsh or sound like an idiot or anything, but I think you should add a little space in between dialogues, if you know what I mean.
Take inspiration/examples from my novel you read (Learning to Like You) if you haven't noticed, in the novel there's a lot of space after each dialogue, and that makes it easier to read.
I'm not trying to be harsh or anything, but it was kinda hard reading when there was almost no space between the dialogues (Not trying to be mean, I really like your novel so far) I just think if you improve a bit, and make more space between dialogues, it'll be much easier for readers to read it.
(I know that your head probably hurts from reading the word "dialogue" after repeating it over a hundred times now🤣 Sorry about that)
Anyways, very good novel, I like it. You got potential :)