Sep 02, 2025
To:Bubbles
Hey, thanks for the mini-review! I appreciate you taking the time to read it.
I agree with most of what you pointed out, and I think it's a consequence of both the very short time frame I had to write this (also my lack of planning, which was just stupid on my my part), and also my chronic inability to write male protagonists (which is quite ironic considering every protagonist of every story I've ever written fits that bill lol). That cascades into his relative lack of goals other than "returning to the real world" trope, and also why this doesn't quite feel like isekai—it's not really about wish-fulfillment, as many modern isekai are. I will say there is something he must overcome later on, but I could have brought that aspect up sooner.
The White Death might feel a bit off because I changed the concept quite late into the writing process. And I took some pains to make the Debuggun somewhat balanced, but it might have made it too contrived. It was inspired by the Debug Stick in Minecraft that can change block states, but perhaps the whole concept went a bit out of whack. We shall see.
Although technically I've finished writing the entire story, I still have almost a month to make changes before the deadline, so this might not be the final version. It depends on whether I do have the time and the willpower to fix this.