Aug 09, 2023
I’ve got nothing to critique here, although I’m not the best reader. This was great and my sympathies go out to this poor dude. (Not that I don’t notice he’s drinking ALCOHOL) But yea this is a great way to get me in the mood and feel out our boy DAVE here. Wine isn’t exactly what I expected of a supposedly young man, but maybe he’s just different to my drunk guy expectations. Figured he’d just get wasted on several cheap beers over some internet breakup. Poor Miira.
I guess one complaint I’d have is the when miira types “gosh you’re working me hard.”
Just sounds off, although things typed in game chats can always be misspoken and come off wrong. And no I’m not dirty minded, this does just sounded weird.
Great prologue though, can’t wait to read more.
