Jul 13, 2021
Wanted to drop a comment to follow up on our private chat.
I know you're trying to portray a narrow minded character's perspective, but I think it would work better if she was observing the world poorly, perhaps through the lens of fighting (since that seems to be the meat and potatoes of your story). She would know she's in a forest, and thus that there are trees for cover and which would obstruct movement, and roots that might trip her, but she wouldn't see the flowers because they don't matter to her. That kind of thing. A world that isn't described is bland.
As for the magic system you're trying to introduce, it's not making sense to me. I think this goes back to her simply knowing nothing at all about anything, but the Sanderson Laws of Magic are a discussed topic for a reason. The reader needs to understand what people are capable of before they will care about someone being in danger. Superman isn't threatened by a mugger; he's threatened by kryptonite.
I don't understand how there is a monster that manifests loot upon death, and can be distracted by a handful of grass in the air, except it's not really grass. I as the reader haven't been given the clues to the puzzle.
DM me if you want me to delve into more details.