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i watch anime and kdrama, read manga, lightnovels, webnovels, oeln, manhwa, webtoons and manhua. im a dude. when i got bored of reading stories, i set out to make my ideal stories. read my stuff, it's pretty good.
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Aug 28, 2022
To:Koyomi
killing you was a pleasure lol
thanks!
Aug 23, 2022
To:ALTaccounti
thanks! i need to get my act together already with this kinda stuff. cancelling rebooting old stuff lol. i decided to turn CIHU into a manga myself.
Jul 08, 2022
To:Cas_Cade
yep... it was too cringe to exist
Jul 05, 2022
bruh. iota died a tragic death.
Jul 02, 2022
indeed, but the divergence meter changed a little too much and with it the entire plot for springs rain changed too. lol, blame the green upa.
Dec 27, 2021
To:Bubbles
Well the blood pressure drops. Meaning less blood to lung per cycle. Causing the blood oxygen level to drop. Symptoms usually paired with lungs that don't fully inflate.
Dec 21, 2021
To:Fuzzy Rabid Usagi
Let's just write that off as a stylistic choice. I read the thing again and it still feels fine to me so I don't really see myself changing that.
Dec 20, 2021
I see. So little tid bits to add tension. That's entirely doable. I'll get to it after editing and uploading the whole thing. Thanks for the input!
Eh? Am I weird for using that stuff? I mean I don't talk like that cuz it's obnoxious. But I do tend to think like that.
He isn't as hung up on his mother's love life as he is towards the fact there's a stranger in his house. Sure he knows that he is the primary reason why Akito was still a stranger but his 'non-stranger' absent dad was pathetic so he had decent reason to be wary of the dude.
The wall is what I tackle in the next chapter.
BTW THANKS FOR READING! I'M OUT OF YANDERE MODE!
Okay the fact that I have to explain this means that I need to go back and edit this chapter again.
This interaction was entirely based on one I had with a friend recently. I knew the girl for 5 or 6 years. And then we spent 2 years apart for no reason.
When we met again we immediately went back to acting like assholes to each other. But a lot of that was just us trying to maintain the same sort of chemistry we had.
This was the awkward interaction of trying to keep something the same even though it had clearly changed.
Also Saeko acting the way she did was the reason for the wall in the next chapter that you mentioned.
I do understand the part about the narrator being descriptive. That was because I wanted to set the mood up. This entire chapter barely had 2 things that happened - (1) he went home (2) he met his mom and his new parent.
The part about weird word choices and poetic flow, I didn't get. My word choices were grounded to what I use on a daily. There were some figures of speech here and there but they were rather basic too.
I mean I can't really write something complex without even knowing what erudite means.
The next plot heavier chapters cut back on the description.
Dec 16, 2021
A rather well-developed character right off the bat. Now I wouldn't go ahead and claim to know something about Damien because that might be an easy plot twist for the future. But the elf lady? You used plenty of reiterations to solidify her characters. Using the solid character base I sincerely hope this is a cast centric story.
Dec 13, 2021
Another great start! I actually sat through that and read it. Which is rare, because I never read. So good job!👍