Aug 02, 2021
Once again, you blew my expectations out of the water. You, sir/ma'am, know exactly how to send the reader into an emotional roller coaster.
I think we all knew that there was no way that Evan was going to win this fight as Remus is still alive in the present. But having both his mum and his sister sacrifice themselves willingly actually made me cry. Eveline in particular, when she stands there ready to fight even though she is as traumatised as anyone else gave me goosebumps.
Even though we only just knew Eveline 2 chapters ago and the mother for like a single scene, you have a talent for making things so impactful. One chapter I am giggling and the next one has me crying. Your chapters are a lot shorter than most of the other front page novels, but your quality trumps quantity.
And the way you just wrap this chapter up is perfect. She said "ew" previously when we see her brother tell her that she saved him from his nightmare. But deep down, I can tell that she's actually happy doing that, hence her last words before she died.
Any other author would use just use this as a scene for Evan's growth since he is the MC, but you went a step further and made this whole past 3 chapters about Eveline being a genuine hero (training, saving someone). The Consequence of Saving the World is a heavy title, but you nailed it