Nov 28, 2025

Thank you for reading. For now, this is where my revising of the available chapters stop. While doing it, I noticed the work actually needed more bird's eye view revision and likely an outline. It was originally written in 95% improv fashion.

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Nov 28, 2025

To:chesarka

Hi. Thank you for your feedback. I have since done some editing on this chapter, and beyond. Won't hide I'm treating this as a writing exercise more than anything else.

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Nov 15, 2025

To:Tuflyel [2VL]

Hi. I have no idea which features this website had back then. I do recall discovering it through myanimelist, tho.

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Nov 15, 2025

To:ALTaccounti

Hi! For some reason, I was notified of your comment three years later. Thank you for your comment. This story was a very early draft and I've started (and abandoned) work on lots of other projects since then. It has been a rather humbling experience. I still wish to deal with some of those themes, especially since the universe this is set in is pretty much alive in my notes. I don't think I'll continue this project, but one thing is sure, I want to keep writing. If anything, it's therapeutic to me. Have a good one!

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Nov 15, 2016

XOR//DIGITAL Thank you for the feedback, I'm glad you liked it. Right now I'm thinking of relaunching the story as a whole after I came upon a book called "Hooked" by L.Edgerton. In hindsights this prologue is waaay too scarce,I agree =)

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Oct 26, 2016

Thank you for reading and for the feedback! Next chapter will be out around Friday.

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Oct 26, 2016

Chesarka, thank you for the comment. Not to give myself excuses, but it's my first time publishing anything from whatever I have finished and/or ongoing, thus every bit of criticism is much welcome. Could you please elaborate? Is it the grammar or the style that you spotted the few errors in?

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Oct 26, 2016

K. Aikyou, thank you for the advice. I'm starting to get what the main issue is so far. Guess I should read more and practice more, too.

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Oct 24, 2016

Thanks for the feedback, Chouko_Chan! I'll try to sort it out so that it's less confusing. Chapter 2 coming out around Wednesday.

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Oct 21, 2016

Fabcats1, thank you for commenting. I drew inspiration from the way many action movies start, with the hero already in peril with no time to prepare. I'll probably post Chapter 2 by the end of week-end.

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Oct 12, 2016

Haha, I dig that style! Sounds funny
On line 5, I think you meant "weird" unless "wird" was deliberate, in which case never mind :)

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Oct 12, 2016

Good job, the writing is smooth and the style puts it closer to "standard" litterature rather than light novel straightforward streamlined style.

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Oct 12, 2016

Looks intriguing, bonus points for an established pair, we don't see one that often in manga, anime, and light novels.

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