Nov 07, 2023
Jumping through these small screenshots of life to deliver the needed exposition works really well for your story. Also using known tropes ("the rich kid who is alone") to give the characters some meat on the bones really helped with the flow.
I have to admit that the beginning took away a bit from the punch at the end, but the overall pacing was fast enough to not make me think about it too much. Kinda wished he had continued on because nobody likes falling, but not every story needs to do a 180 just for the sake of it.
Overall, one of the best entries I've read so far :)
