Jan 04, 2018
Quite heartwarming! Loved it a lot!
I hope I'm not sounding rude, but I think it could've brought out the emotion you were trying to express much more if you showed how hard and how long he was containing his tears, instead of simply stating he held back his tears for one hour.
Maybe something like how he was biting his lower lip to divert the pain of loneliness. Or how he tried to fight back every hiccup he made. How the world seemed too big and too fast to search his mother in the sea of people that were twice his size. Basically building up the sense of powerlessness just before his angel appeared.
There's nothing wrong with it as it is, though. It delivered just fine and was a fun read!
