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Jun 10, 2022

To:BernoutBard

Oh dear god, one can only hope! 🤣

Work, Please! ~From World's Greatest Sweeper to the Far Future's Salaryman~

Chapter:4

Jun 09, 2022

The voice in her head is making me quite curious. Getting Johnny Silverhand vibes. 😏

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Chapter:1

Jun 08, 2022

To:Deleted User

Would be rad to have a power like that without the drawback of being blind like Daredevil 🤣

Work, Please! ~From World's Greatest Sweeper to the Far Future's Salaryman~

Chapter:4

Jun 08, 2022

To:Nekotakuu

Thanks! Gonna try my best to keep it that way till the end~

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Chapter:1

Jun 08, 2022

To:Deleted User

Thank you!
I'm happy you're interested in the world. And yeah, I edited it to make the prologue cleaner and more digestible in a more general sense. I'm pretty happy with the result. 😁

Work, Please! ~From World's Greatest Sweeper to the Far Future's Salaryman~

Chapter:1

Jun 08, 2022

To:Deleted User

Yeah, I feel it's cleaner too. I couldn't have done it without you and everyone's critique, so I'm really thankful for it! I mostly write about feelings than not, so I hope the rest of the story will be quite satisfactory.

Work, Please! ~From World's Greatest Sweeper to the Far Future's Salaryman~

Chapter:1

Jun 07, 2022

To:Deleted User

That's a good thought, to be honest!
Chapter 0 does seem more like a "bonus" than anything, but I made it so that it's basically a puzzle that will (probably) make a lot more sense when everything is done. 😂
I would also like to think that it's confusing on purpose to perfectly match Kuroiwa's mental place at the time of his awakening. Which may or may not work, but I did want to try anyway.
Either way, thanks for your thoughts!

Work, Please! ~From World's Greatest Sweeper to the Far Future's Salaryman~

Chapter:2

Jun 07, 2022

To:Momentie

Thank you!
I've considered changing up a lot of things, and hopefully it makes it better in general. I really appreciate the critique, it helps me so much!

Work, Please! ~From World's Greatest Sweeper to the Far Future's Salaryman~

Chapter:1

Jun 07, 2022

To:Deleted User

Yeah, I do have plans to put light on a lot of themes about the concept of life, death, and "living" - that said, I don't know how well I'll pull it off in the end, but either way I wanna try weaving the themes in a lighter, preferably more comic way than what's normally done. 🤣
There's something in particular that only Kuroiwa can do (that he himself doesn't realize yet) that can really affect the people around him. Hopefully everyone will see what that is in the future.
Thank you for the comment! 😀

Work, Please! ~From World's Greatest Sweeper to the Far Future's Salaryman~

Chapter:3

Jun 07, 2022

To:Deleted User

Thanks for the critique! I really appreciate it. Never thought how it could be from that point of view, so I'm giving some thought about how it could be more presentable for a general audience while keeping the "joke" about putting an actual script in.
And yeah, it can be pretty off-putting for some people. It's a risky move. Reason I made it this way is to bewilder or confuse readers, which in of itself is a risky maneuver. The curiosity is either piqued or it's not. 😅 It's also there to introduce some vague concepts and names that will definitely come up later, and I hope it's a "puzzle" that will eventually complete itself by the end.
Thanks again for the comment~

Work, Please! ~From World's Greatest Sweeper to the Far Future's Salaryman~

Chapter:1

Jun 05, 2022

To:JJPiedraOELN

Thanks!
I thought it would be really bizarre way to start a story and wanted to try it out 😅

Work, Please! ~From World's Greatest Sweeper to the Far Future's Salaryman~

Chapter:1

Jun 04, 2022

To:Deleted User

That sounds like it could become a habit of his 🤣

Work, Please! ~From World's Greatest Sweeper to the Far Future's Salaryman~

Chapter:2

Jun 04, 2022

To:Deleted User

Paying rent while holding a job that barely pays itself is just about the worst
Hopefully the riots won't cause him too much trouble 🤔

Work, Please! ~From World's Greatest Sweeper to the Far Future's Salaryman~

Chapter:3

Jun 03, 2022

To:Deleted User

Yep, that's what it was!
I tried to make it a really weird way to contain a lot of core concepts in the world that'll appear as the story goes on, too😁

Work, Please! ~From World's Greatest Sweeper to the Far Future's Salaryman~

Chapter:2

Jun 03, 2022

To:Deleted User

Yeah, it's really meant to be a little freaky, haha
Many books I've read have lyrics to songs or poems written before the start of their story, so I wanted to do a little twist on that by making it look like a soulless corporate product 😅

Work, Please! ~From World's Greatest Sweeper to the Far Future's Salaryman~

Chapter:2

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