Feb 25, 2025
The comedy in this is good. Geniunely funny. When it lands, it lands well. My, well not only, gripe is:
Eddy being an idiot is funny but kinda... samey.😅 Some kind of character growth would be nice to see (I'll assume this is planned) otherwise it'll become stale. Also, like bubbles said, there needs to be an overarching goal. Getting gas is ok for a short term goal but after that...
Then there's the worldbuilding, water dried up, but its left unexplained. As this is just four chapters in, I assume it will be explained down the line. More hints as to why would be welcome. Plus, Rom and Eddy are never 'genuinely' in trouble, because of the cartoonish-ness of the work, it's hard to feel any stakes. It's fine if this is just meant to be slapstick comedy, but a bit more balance is needed if the goal is to go beyond that to both a great and funny apocalypse.
Regardless, I think it's a great story for just four chapters. Keep it up. 👍
