Mar 01, 2025
I loved the use of timeskip in this chapter. Everything flowed smoothly. It's not unnecessarily complicated, a simple story about two people who like each other. And sometimes, simplicity is all you need. Also, Jumo finding her pronunciation of his name cute is also very cute. 🥰
The difference between both Sakuya's and Jumo's life already has me looking forward to what will happen.
That said, if jumo is the protagonist, he needs something that makes him standout beyond 'he likes a girl.'
Like something that makes him interesting on his own, before meeting Sakuya I mean. I get he is normal, and yes it's the first chapter so his interesting qualities can always shine later. But a small clue so he doesn't feel like a self-insert.
It would be really funny if he vehemently doesn't believe in yokai or the supernatural, for example. Or he has a part-time job or he likes gardening.
Of course you don't need to take my advice, you know your story best. Plus, if it's more of a deuteragonist thing going on, then you can just ignore that.
Anyway, great chapter, like I said above, looking forward to more. :]
