Jul 09, 2025

Loved this chapter, you managed to capture that cosy vibe despite the intense atmosphere and the killings. And we got to know the characters and what they are thinking, some of their emotions. Loved this chapter, so much. Keep it going

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Jun 30, 2025

nice horror elements and i like the suits guys concept but they could be better, maybe which weapons they have or unique x-tics but it's good so far.

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Jun 30, 2025

nice horror elements and i like the suits guys concept but they could be better, maybe which weapons they have or unique x-tics but it's good so far.

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Jun 27, 2025

To:theACE

By the way, what did you think of the flashbacks, i hope they weren't distracting

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Jun 27, 2025

To:theACE

Thank you, it was always the plan to slow some chapters for the characters and their life outside football...

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Jun 26, 2025

To:Barbados Nascar

I tried to make him as detestable as possible while also grounding him. I already have his backstory, actually most of the characters i have backstories for, it's just figuring out how to insert them into the main story in a way that makes sense. I'm still working it out

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Jun 25, 2025

To:Barbados Nascar

Thanks bro, In my mind Zengo is a character i've wanted to include in the story but I could never figure out when to include him, if it makes sense. Juma is a character i liked a lot and I am thinking of writing a long separate story for him and some of the other characters, I'm still planning it out but thanks for the read, waiting on yours to drop. peace

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Jun 03, 2025

To:theACE

Yeah, its still the flashback. sorry its draagging at bit too long. These flashback scenes are also enjoying to write for me, I want to write them with meaning and not just for writing sakes, like its a way to get to the know the characters at a specific time before the main story filling in the blanks on how they came to be how they are in the present story

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Jun 03, 2025

To:Barbados Nascar

I see what you mean and i thought about it but i thought it would be too long. I am currently working on something that would let me write these tales without restirctions on the plot and drag it on. thank you for your suggestion, i guess i could have added one or two things

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May 31, 2025

To:Barbados Nascar

I wasn't sure everyone would get the references but its great you did.

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May 25, 2025

i am liking this arc much more, obviously after the last big arc with fighting. its nice to slow down nd get to meet new characters. like the dynamic between Michael and his brother. Well done

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May 22, 2025

To:Barbados Nascar

Thanks, it took a while. Next chapter is coming out shortly

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May 22, 2025

To:Mila

Thanks for giving it a read

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May 12, 2025

He's gonna regret that

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May 05, 2025

Is there like a specific reason why the Dullahan and the MC "take" people. Is it like they kill bad people or

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