Jan 06, 2025
Your world-building is intriguing, blending humans and androids into a compelling narrative about unity and progress. Shinku’s journey is relatable, and his nervousness adds a layer of humanity that grounds the story. The interactions, especially with Bontly, bring a touch of humor and warmth that balances the high-tech, formal atmosphere.
A suggestion for improvement: consider adding more depth to the setting and emotional stakes to help the reader feel immersed in the challenges and dynamics of this futuristic world. The potential is there; it just needs a little more fleshing out! 😊 Looking forward to seeing how Shinku and his team evolve. 🚀
