Jan 03, 2025
Your story presents a fascinating look at a meticulously controlled society, and the details of the IPU’s structure and influence are captivating. I especially enjoyed Calla’s perspective—it adds a unique voice to the narrative, blending privilege with her unwavering sense of duty. The pacing is solid, though I think a touch more focus on character dynamics could make it even stronger. Overall, a very intriguing start, and I’m excited to see how this world and its conflicts develop! Great job!
