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Jan 03, 2025

Wow, this prologue is heavy with tension and emotion! The depiction of the sterilized hospital and the frantic pace of vaccinations pulled me in immediately. The moral dilemma and the raw portrayal of Isayama’s guilt really give the story a unique and haunting atmosphere. The details about the futuristic world and the context of S Flu make the stakes feel incredibly high. It’s heartbreaking and intense, but also deeply thought-provoking. Amazing start!

BlackBrain

Chapter:1

Jan 03, 2025

Your prologue creates a tense and immersive atmosphere right from the start, with vivid descriptions of the futuristic setting and the chilling details of the crime scene. I love how the integration of AI and neural enhancements feels seamless yet unsettling, adding a layer of tension to the narrative. The mystery surrounding the untraceable victim and the ominous blood message sets up an intriguing hook. Maybe exploring the emotional responses of Agent CIX a bit more could make the stakes feel even higher for the reader. Great work—excited to see where this story goes!

HARMONIC CONVERGENCE

Chapter:0

Jan 03, 2025

This chapter is hilarious and brimming with creativity! The concept of ‘memory smoothie’ and the chaos it brings is both absurd and brilliant. Gomi’s quirky genius and Shiku’s frantic reactions make for a highly entertaining dynamic. Excited to see how they’ll get out of this mess!

I Swapped Bodies with My School’s Cleaning Robot, Who Somehow Has More Rizz Than Me?!

Chapter:1

Jan 03, 2025

To:chibiandreea

Thank you for the reply! 😊 I really enjoyed reading your story, and it’s great to see how much personality and humor you put into your writing. I’ll definitely keep an eye out for more of your updates—it’s refreshing to see such unique storytelling! Best of luck with the contest! 🚀✨

Pick a Brain & Fall in Love

Chapter:1

Jan 03, 2025

To:chibiandreea

Thank you so much for your thoughtful comment! 😊 I'm glad the concept of "time bubbles" came across as chilling—it's meant to highlight just how unsettling the world these characters live in really is. And I’m so happy you enjoyed the dynamic between Elias and Lucy! He truly does his best to protect her despite the overwhelming odds. Your support and kind words mean a lot! 💛✨

The Drift of Time

Chapter:1

Jan 03, 2025

This chapter does a fantastic job of immersing the reader in the protagonist’s disorientation and emotional struggle—it really pulls you in! The descriptions of physical sensations and environment are vivid and impactful. My only suggestion would be to perhaps streamline some of the inner monologue at the start to let the tension build more naturally. Overall, it’s a strong and engaging opening. Great work!

Saturation: Blue

Chapter:1

Jan 03, 2025

To:no_12_know

Thank you so much for your kind words! I'm really glad you enjoyed the dynamic between Elias and his daughter—it’s such an important part of the story for me. Your feedback about the setting is super encouraging too! If you have any suggestions or thoughts as you read on, I’d love to hear them!

The Drift of Time

Chapter:1

Jan 03, 2025

Wow, this chapter was absolutely stunning! 🌟 The way you brought the Arena to life was mesmerizing, and Raine’s performance was both powerful and deeply emotional. Her evolution, showing cracks in her perfection, was such a beautiful touch—it made her feel so real. Astra’s perspective added great contrast, and I loved the tension between them. The ending left me on edge—can’t wait to see what happens next! 👏✨

Hotwired!

Chapter:1

Jan 03, 2025

This chapter expands wonderfully on the futuristic and whimsical world you've built! The concept of "holostyle" hair is such a creative and visually captivating idea, and the integration of orbital storage and memory enhancements really grounds the sci-fi elements. Hana's reactions feel so genuine, adding a relatable human perspective amidst all the advanced technology. The introduction of Lyn brings a fun, chaotic energy to the story – I can't wait to see where her curiosity takes them! Great work, and I'm eager for more! 🚀✨

Limitless Vlogging: A journey around the utopian supercontinent

Chapter:2

Jan 03, 2025

To:Mario Nakano 64

Thank you so much for the feedback, Mario! 😊 I'm glad you enjoyed the world-building! Your point about the headline is super insightful—I can see how 'Alt-History City' might break the immersion a bit. I’ll consider replacing it with the actual name of the city to keep the flow intact. Thanks again for pointing that out and for your encouragement! 🚀

The Drift of Time

Chapter:1

Jan 03, 2025

This was such a unique and fascinating perspective on cryogenics and second chances! 🧠❄️ The blend of introspection and humor is so well done, especially the relatable thoughts about lipstick and life goals. I’m really curious about the journey ahead—H444 is such an intriguing start! Keep it up! 🚀✨

Pick a Brain & Fall in Love

Chapter:1

Jan 03, 2025

This story does a fantastic job blending futuristic concepts with a touch of humor and relatable curiosity. Hana's reactions to the future feel genuine, and the supporting characters add depth and charm. The gravity-aid concept is fascinating—can't wait to see more of this utopian world unfold!

Limitless Vlogging: A journey around the utopian supercontinent

Chapter:1

Jan 03, 2025

Wow, this was such a thrilling ride! The pacing kept me hooked from start to finish, and the mix of humor and action is perfectly balanced. The protagonist’s personality shines through so vividly, and I love how you’ve built the world with such intriguing details. Looking forward to seeing where the story goes next!

Phantom Frequency

Chapter:1

Jan 03, 2025

To:lolitroy

Thank you so much for your feedback! I’ve actually gone ahead and removed the subtitles based on your suggestion, as I can see how they might disrupt the immersion during intense moments. I’d love to hear your thoughts on the updated flow—do you feel it’s more seamless now? Or is there anything else you think could enhance the reading experience further? Your input is super valuable, and I really appreciate you taking the time to share it!

The Drift of Time

Chapter:2

Jan 02, 2025

Wow, the concept of the ‘Digiscape’ is both intriguing and eerie—it feels like a mix of sci-fi and philosophical exploration. The world-building is captivating, and I really enjoyed how the narrative plays with the idea of a ‘digital afterlife.’ The protagonist’s perspective adds a relatable touch of skepticism and dry humor, which contrasts nicely with the grandeur of the setting. I’m curious to see how the story will delve deeper into the mysteries of the Digiscape and what challenges lie ahead. Great start!

Memoria

Chapter:1

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