Oct 04, 2025
Hey! Again, thank you so much for your comment and nice words.
Regarding your story:
I already read the comments, so I try to not go into detail about the amount of words used for describing stuff. It just seems to be your style, and honestly it's pretty normal for Light Novels imo. I just think that webnovels, being such short chapters, often don't use that writing style. It's because it feels like not much is happening. One thing I would try to change, if you want to publish your books, is the dialogue. While it is normal for Light Novels to explain certain sceneries or clothing with A LOT of words, its typically not normal for dialogues to be this long. Also, sentences in general. 3 or 4 times it was very hard for me to follow a sentence, as english is not my main language. About the story though, this definetely was a nice introduction to a nice story and I'll make sure to read it the whole way through. Im excited to see if you used a little bit of their constructive criticism in later chapters. I read your bio, so I can only say: just keep writing stories on websites like these and implement what most of the people in the comments tell you. Because its such people that will be reading your works when it's released as a book. Normally, they are right. I'd be glad if we can help each other on our way to our goals :)
