Sep 10, 2025

To:Ribal Husein

Our main Kazuo is an interesting chap so far. Full of raw talent but unrefined. With training under the right person, it’s interesting to see just how far he’ll grow. Though I’m not sure any sort of training can help him in the romance department lol.

Which brings me to Setsuna, his squad leader and new mentor/rival? figure. He’s a good foil for Kazuo and a character with confidence and ability.

Lastly Rei is good for comedy. Even though he has personal space issues.

His two squad mates seem interesting. Though I’ll wait a few more chapters to form an opinion.

Essentially I’d say Kazuo is the top one for now. Mostly because we much of the story from his perspective. He’s a reluctant hero and has a lot of potential for growth in his arc.

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Sep 09, 2025

Quite the hectic transition!

But at least Sora is no longer alone. At this point, he needs to have someone with him. Being alone with his thoughts is not good for him.

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Sep 09, 2025

Ah Zeno, I judged you too harshly.

And now Sora is alone again and worse for the wear.

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Sep 09, 2025

I am curious to see what this final exam is and what all that training was for!

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Sep 08, 2025

Looks like Sora and Zeno got away with it for now.

Their shinanigans kind of remind me of my military days.

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Sep 08, 2025

What in the world is 16 up to?

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Sep 08, 2025

Hm,

I’m not sure how I feel about 15. I feel like I’m waiting for the other shoe to drop…

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Sep 08, 2025

Indeed, why *are* you there?

Either you are going through some kind of training, or this is some elaborate social experiment.

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Sep 08, 2025

To:Ramen-sensei

I know the feeling. I felt paralyzed initially myself but I just figured “the hell with it.”

As for views, they’ll come. You have a great story here so far, so you count on me binging this.

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Sep 08, 2025

Good that this suit has limitations. makes the fight more exciting!

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Sep 08, 2025

Our protagonist is right to be wary. Someone that friendly could very well be genuine. Or, a threat.

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Sep 08, 2025

It’s never a sin to be born in the dirt. But it’s a terrible sin to want to stay there.

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Thrilling so far. Am I about to witness a phoenix rising. Or must I endure further empathetic hardship in anticipation. I suppose I should read the next chapter…

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Sep 08, 2025

Ah, reuniting with dear friends.

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Sep 08, 2025

So Kazuo is powerful but untutored fighter. I wonder how he’ll fare with some training.

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Sep 08, 2025

Very well written so far. First person is especially difficult to pull off without sounding monotonous.

You should give yourself more credit (referencing our conversation in my story). By my first impression you are a very adept wordsmith and your character already has me hooked with their "gift for the gab".

I've got this in my library now and I'm looking forward to what comes next!

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