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Oct 28, 2024

Such a sigma move by Ren, I like the atmosphere you have here, and the way you write Ren is interesting, my only thing would be to work on the pacing a bit, there's a lot that goes on here without much to connect it. There's this janky feeling that I feel could be resolved by making this like two or three chapters instead of condensing it into one medium-length chapter.

Other than that, great work so far, keep it up!

The Reckless Adventures of Ren Takahashi

Chapter:1

Oct 28, 2024

Honestly prolly the funniest idea I've seen so far in the contest, I'm all in. Keep it up!

Newton's Empire

Chapter:1

Oct 28, 2024

Literally me

Crown of Tomorrow

Chapter:1

Oct 28, 2024

Everything's protocol with enough bullshitting

Also, that cover art is fire! Nice chapter so far, looking forward to see what your cooking.

Parallel in Two

Chapter:1

Oct 28, 2024

To:Taylor J

Forcibly dragging her would reduce their actions to murder, better to coerce her so they have no fault of their own 😃

Heaven Bound

Chapter:7

Oct 23, 2024

Super down with the comfy vibes here. In between all the apocalyptic entries, this really stands out to me as something I super vibe with. Keep it up!

To The Green Lake

Chapter:1

Oct 23, 2024

Cool start. I liked all the worldbuilding, my only thing is it's all so frontloaded without much in the way of characterization or time to know the world, giving me almost textbook vibes. Still cool chunk of worldbuilding, excited to read more!

Anima: Don't Take the Bait

Chapter:0

Oct 23, 2024

I feel they are just not trying hard enough to live as 18th-century philosophers. L bozo

An Ode to the Stars

Chapter:2

Oct 23, 2024

Woah,

Genesis

Chapter:1

Oct 21, 2024

All hail the union

An Ode to the Stars

Chapter:1

Oct 21, 2024

This will be Japan in 2014

Memoria

Chapter:1

Oct 19, 2024

To:Taylor J

IDK they sound like they'd be fun to talk to

Heaven Bound

Chapter:5

Oct 15, 2024

To:Deleted User

peak ik

Heaven Bound

Chapter:15

Oct 15, 2024

To:Deleted User

🗿

Heaven Bound

Chapter:14

Oct 14, 2024

To:Taylor J

Mari’s dad is the absolute goat

Heaven Bound

Chapter:4

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