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Jul 12, 2024

Chapter 2 when 😀

Baker Cat:The Reincarnator And The Witch Of Darkness

Chapter:1

Jun 16, 2024

I can't lie I absolutely adored this. I think that spiritually it just gets so much of what makes this prompt, and honestly, what makes travel in itself so special. Great work with this one!

Vicarious Visit

Chapter:1

Jun 16, 2024

I loved how heartwarming that ending was. Sometimes I feel stories forget that they have the ability to make people smile, and this did just that for me. Best of luck!

1001 Origami Cranes

Chapter:1

Jun 16, 2024

I like the different angle you brought here compared to some of the other entries. It's a bit of fresh air comparatively IMO. Nice job

CHRONOL∅G - 3XCHANGE

Chapter:1

Jun 16, 2024

Ay I like what you were going for here, serves as a pretty good contrast to your other entry. Solid job imo

That Spring, When She Appeared In Thulian

Chapter:1

Jun 12, 2024

To:Lei

Thanks for checking this out!

Six Months in Aichi

Chapter:1

Jun 12, 2024

To:Kitsune

For real, I'm a bit lucky in that I still talk to a decent chunk of the friends I made over there, but it's so much harder when you live half a world away. Thanks a ton for checking this out!

Six Months in Aichi

Chapter:1

May 28, 2024

Honey’d and Feeded 🫡

Timeloop Uncle

Chapter:1

May 23, 2024

The alcoholism really makes uni life be one of a kind🙏🙏

Seriously though, thanks for reading!

Six Months in Aichi

Chapter:1

May 23, 2024

To:Steward McOy

They go insane about the pension shit there, I said no several times and they still sent me enough ads and forums to make a book, and I didn't even have any income while there either lmao.

also Genki still haunts my dreams

Six Months in Aichi

Chapter:1

May 23, 2024

To:dmznot

I honestly think Grammarly hates me at this point, what did I do to them 😭

Thanks for checking this out!

Six Months in Aichi

Chapter:1

May 22, 2024

Nice job on this! My main thing would be to try to work on your flow a bit, as it's a bit stiff and repetitive IMO. There's a lot of X does this and Y does that without much to really break the flow.
Overall solid job though, gl

The Settling Sun

Chapter:1

May 22, 2024

To:Bubbles

Ay, thanks for taking a look.

When writing this, I wanted to challenge myself to focus on writing something without any dialogue, as I have a bad habit of overusing dialogue waaaay to much, though looking back I think you are right on the dialogue point.

I'll try to take this into account, especially the protagonist part, as that's something I wanna really focus on, especially for MALxHF coming up.

Again, thanks for taking a look Bubbles!

Six Months in Aichi

Chapter:1

May 21, 2024

I like how you use photography in this, though there were a few times I had to go back and re-read to really understand what was going on. Maybe clear those up a bit.

Good luck with everything!

After Winter Came Spring

Chapter:1

May 21, 2024

To:Deleted User

⛓️🐀🔥⚔️

Six Months in Aichi

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