Jul 28, 2021
To:Bubbles
Thanks for the comment! You're 100% right on the first point. Good editing is going to be necessary. Writing beautiful sentences is probably my biggest weakness.
The absurdist comedy is the main focus of this work, so I'm glad that got through as a strength even if you didn't personally enjoy it. That said, I always welcome suggestions on how to improve it, so I'm grateful for the detailed feedback.
As for the last point, this is something I am aware of. In my first draft, I didn't even have that backstory and realized she needed more. I definitely intend to work on her characterization in future chapters.
Overall, while I intend to finish this work for the contest, it is ultimately for practice, so I'm happy to receive any advice. Thanks again!
