Dec 04, 2025
Hey there, nice beginning! Your cover art is very stylish and catchy and I appreciate that it doesn't use AI, which is why I decided to give this a try.
I will say, you're doing yourself a disservice by keeping your synopsis vague and giving your readers no information, imo. It's fine to want to be mysterious, you don't have to give away the entire plot on it, but you really don't say absolutely anything. I could apply your synopsis to coming-of-age stories like Billy Elliot, but it would also fit Lord of the Rings - the two are vastly different, but without giving us a real plot summary there's really no way for people to feel any real interest, and in this day and age you gotta learn how to get people's attention and retain it in just a few words by letting them peek into your world. Maybe I'm wrong though, maybe you describe your favorite series by saying only "oh yeah it's so cool, it's about emotion and identity", and literally nothing else lol, so what do I know.
Anyway, I'm a sucker for magic school settings, it's fast-paced and something is always happening, you don't waste time on long explanations which I'm grateful for, and their interactions with each other are fun and natural (I think this last chapter is missing some lines at the end, though?) Either way, keep up the good work, I hope you finish the entire thing, I'm excited to see what you come up with!