Aug 06, 2021
It caught my attention because I just couldn't figure it out how something can be both BL and shoujo 🤣🤣
Okay, serious feedback time now. I don't think you know what 'boys love' means. Please search it up. You'll understand that it doesn't go with your story.
With that out of the way, I understand that this may be your first time writing. Try to pay attention to your structure, is the first thing I'll like to say. Commas, semicolons, and paragraph breaks are important, otherwise the process of reading can become a chore. There are also a few grammatical mistakes, but those you can fix with the help of google docs/grammarly (a lot of reading will also surely help). If executed properly, I think your plot has the potential to tug a lot of heartstrings, and trust me, even the most boorish people love sentimental stuff at the end of the day XD
Anyway, good luck. Bookmarking this, and would try to come back to read the complete thing when the work pressure isn't as high as it is rn. Ciao. :')