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Jul 18, 2021

To:kazesenken

Thank you for the feedback. I understand what you're saying, I too felt like that the second part lacked... Flavor, compared to the first part and even the other chapters that end on cliffhangers. I guess what I could've done is slicing it up and flashbacking it in the other chapters, while making the first part 'prologue'. Well, that ship has sailed and I'm barely keeping up with reaching my daily goals ;_; anyway, if possible I'll try to make this one a bit leaner perhaps

MINUS • PLUS

Chapter:1

Jul 18, 2021

As a mecha fan I absolutely loved it. Smooth writing, the descriptions were on point and the atmosphere it created had me hooked. Just at one point, at the flashback part, I felt a tonal shift. I think if you added it in a different place as a proper flashback it would've worked better. Anyway thats it for nitpicking, overall great job :3

Lost Paradise

Chapter:1

Jul 18, 2021

Wild, wild chapter.......... And wtf was that at the end? What is Maribell thinking 🤔🤔

Why Kill? When Witches Can Be Tentacled!

Chapter:8

Jul 18, 2021

Read all three chapters in one breath ❤️ the flow was so good. And I loved that the story doesn't have any villain, or any good/evil distinction we usually get in such fantasy stories. Intrigued about what's gonna happen next!

Ruler of the Outland

Chapter:3

Jul 17, 2021

To:Valtic3D

Hey I like Kirito! If you didn't like sao check the alicization arc, he improves a lot there and not just an op character. Anyway, thank you so much 🤧 I'm just trying to portray a really confused character, much like your story. Lets see how it goes! ❤️

MINUS • PLUS

Chapter:5

Jul 17, 2021

The fight scenes were really good, I could visualise them all the way. Expected the humans-becoming monster thing but still it was well executed. The ending though... You had to do that? Damn you ;_;

REALM ASSASSIN

Chapter:6

Jul 17, 2021

I need a girl like Ume ❤️ too bad the one I'm writing is such a bitch ;_;
Jokes aside, considering you're dealing with complex concepts and writing romance, you're doing a great job. We even get poems, meta parts, it's a complete package xD keep it up!

Crimson Core

Chapter:4

Jul 12, 2021

To:Valtic3D

Please don't assume that, you don't know how dumb I am irl 😂😂😭

Crimson Core

Chapter:2

Jul 12, 2021

That last line... Y u do dis ;_;

REALM ASSASSIN

Chapter:4

Jul 12, 2021

To:Pearlyn.M

Well, she might've read some shoujo manga as well, and knows what makes MCs tick 🌚🌚🤣

MINUS • PLUS

Chapter:3

Jul 12, 2021

To:Valtic3D

You really don't like her do you 🤣🤣🤣

MINUS • PLUS

Chapter:3

Jul 11, 2021

Damn, this was so fluid ❤️ you are really good at stream of consciousness style writing, which is something I'm still trying to master. Hoping to learn more :')

Crescendo at the End of the World

Chapter:2

Jul 11, 2021

This is so good! If someone told me this is the translation of an actual light novel I wouldn't have been surprised! Your writing is so clean and crisp! Looking forward to more!
And I wonder what was that sound that the guests heard 🌚🌚

Why Kill? When Witches Can Be Tentacled!

Chapter:4

Jul 11, 2021

I read all three chapters in one breath, they're so interesting! Writing weird, fucked-up stuff is easy, but it's tough balancing that with good world building and character growth, which makes the readers stick to the story. You've done it :'3 the only thing I'll say is it can do with some editing, just fixing a few lack of punctuation and grammatical mistakes. That'll make it flow more smoothly. Looking forward to the next chapter :')

REALM ASSASSIN

Chapter:2

Jul 11, 2021

Arrgghhhh the lecture was so complicated! Then I saw the op is the same as me 🤣🤣 anyway the build-up is good, and I'm curious to know how he got pulled into world within. Keep it up!

Crimson Core

Chapter:2

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