Jun 05, 2023
Hello!! < 3 
Just thought I should give my thoughts now that I've read three of your chapters!
Reading your work reminds me a little bit of how I wrote a few years back- while your writing isn't by any means bad, as I can see your focus is on what is happening scene to scene, it does lack character voice. It's nice to know what's happening throughout your story, but I feel like I don't really "know" your character's personality other than how they react to their environment. 
Other than that, your story's super intense! Really enjoy how they respond to the dangers that befall them- keep it up <3