Oct 06, 2017
This is why I now know we need a forum. It's great that more than one person is openly suggesting, criticizing, and giving advice. People shouldn't have an issue voicing their concerns so I'm glad that you said something Chesaraka. ThatGuy025, you should take his advice from time to time if he decides to pop up in the comments, his novels are consistent. This is exactly why I would suggest a forum at this point. The comment section is just inefficient. They either get too long, or there is an endless string of comments that say "good job!", "Awesome chapter!", and you literally have to cycle through them constantly, just look at "Nephilim", and its comment section. If we had a forum I'd be able to leave a wider array of advice without fearing having to condense my speech for being to long. You will have this problem eventually when your novel becomes more recognized, believe me, you will. Follow his advice, its worth it.
The reason why I tell you to format, is because its meant to be easily read. Its essentially supposed to be a light Novel. The cluster of your words is too packed and will leave the reader lost. Its like not numbering the pages on an actual hardcover book. You'll eventually ask yourself "what happened?", "Why did he say this?", "where am I again in this chapter?". Also, my comment has become to long, now you know the curse of the comment section!