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Hello! If you give my novel a like, comment, and add it to your library, I'll try to do the same for yours! Even better if you can continue reading it :)
As fellow web novel writers, let's help each other out!
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Aug 13, 2021
I really like your use of line breaks -- it's very poetic and artistic! There are many many questions to be answered, which I think is great for a prologue.
If you have time, please let me know what you think about my novel! :)
Hello! I really like the world-building here -- it seems like you've put a lot of thought into what the two countries are/have/achieved. The history also seems super interesting! My only advice would be to maybe minimize exposition and instead replace it with character interactions and/or dialogue. Your writing right now is very well thought out, but a little curt and straight to the point. Just a thought though!
To:Atharva
Thanks so much! Will do!
Aug 11, 2021
To:Deleted User
Thank you for the feedback! If you enjoyed the chapter, please feel free to continue reading!
The description and dialogue here are pretty top tier! It's really easy for me to visualize the setting, especially with phrases like "devoid of furnishing" and such.
Your cover art drew me in, but your story's gonna keep me here. Despite this being a short prologue, I think you did a really good job with worldbuilding! Onto the next chapter :)
Thanks for the kind comment!
Aug 07, 2021
To:JakeL2
thanks for your support! 😍
Aug 06, 2021
😅😅
close enough!
To:sammie-2005
me neither to be honest 😅
To:Nabu
Thanks! I think the dialogue improves in future chapters, but I do agree that some of my characters' personalities are a little lacking so far. I'll try to work harder, so please continue to let me know what you think!
To:Sevenlock
Thanks for the feedback! I'll try to work on the awkward sentences in future chapters, so please let me know if you think it gets better!
Aug 03, 2021
Hello! I really like the world-building here; it's a really good setup for future chapters! My only suggestion would be to maybe make some of the exposition more conversation-like. There are paragraphs with just one person saying dialogue, but maybe having two people doing back and forth exposition would make things flow better! Just a thought 😅
Also, thanks for liking my novel! Feel free to keep on reading and please let me know what you think :D
To:Matunigari
Thank you so much! I'll try to keep it up 😅
