Aug 16, 2021
Great action-packed start, and a cute family!
I think it's worth proof reading to catch the occasional missing punctuation. I also think you could make use of the bold and italicize options to get even more creative with emphasizing different words here and there.
Good luck on the upcoming chapters!
Also, if you wouldn't mind, I'd appreciate it if you could check out my novel as well and leave reactions or comments as you see fit!