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sumi_non

If you've come across this page, thank you for showing interest. I mainly write niche stuff so it's understandable if you won't like it (but I wish you will).

For an invisible introvert, interaction is magic.

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aaa

Jun 20, 2025

I can relate to this since I kinda write this way too. Without spoiling the little mystery, I personally preferred the third person sections.

Lucky Number

Chapter:1

Jun 19, 2025

To:lolitroy

I'm already trying to make edits with the pointers in mind! While I wanted to apologize for the very confusing™ way of storytelling, I also wanted to say sorry with how careless I've been with my stories. The typos really are showing up in this one (I'll just forget that other, unfinished contest entry with a LOT of them typos x.x).

I'll try to revise with bubbles' advise WHILE ALSO fixing these small yet distracting mistakes...please leave out the grammar I'm bad at that T^T
Thanks for dropping by lolo!

Room Service

Chapter:1

Jun 19, 2025

To:Bubbles

I got another bubbles review I've already won XD

Anyways, I really agree on all the points. I'm just forcing myself to get something done at the time of writing this one. In my opinion, this could theoretically work in a visual medium but my stupid brain thought it'd be just fine. The next two-thirds of the piece was very bad I'm even surprised you still got the whole story! When I reread I was like, "How???" It's sooo confusing XD

With that said, I'll try to revise with a different mindset since I've gotten some great feedback. Maybe this time, I'll try to aim high and write with winning as a goal.

I know this (giving free encouragement) is just normal for you and the others but thanks for taking the time to write all that! I means a lot to be seen.

Room Service

Chapter:1

Jan 21, 2025

To:lolitroy

Sorry for the late reply lolo! Maybe i will continue it but without any time limits idk if I'll be able to give this one a good ending (yes, sometimes I work better under pressure). Anyway, I'm glad something I wrote and planned for less than a month somehow passed your high standards. I really hope I'll be able to write the next arc (the one I plan to do as a temporary ending for the contest) soon.

Meltue

Chapter:5

May 25, 2024

To:lolitroy

Then it just means we found ourselves our target audiences! I really thought I needed to learn a more easier-on-the-eyes writing which I still can't do, but for someone to find worth in this "messy" or "esoteric" style meant a lot!

As for the contest stuff, my first entry was rushed in 1 or 2 weeks before the deadline so it's no good. The more recent one, on the other hand, was restricted a lot by the prompt. However, I grew attached to Musubi to the point I really wanna to a rewrite in the future without worry of rules.

Oh, and also, I'll be sure to return the favor and give my thoughts on your spring entry!

Best of luck to us!

After Winter Came Spring

Chapter:1

May 23, 2024

To:lolitroy

Thank you! Although others pointed out it's far from perfect, I'm happy there's little problems (I hope) for you. This should be an author's note but what I really wanna go for is the "movie feel" which, because of my limited ability, ended up being confusing for most. It's hard to be descriptive while moving the plot and making sure the characters remained consistent given my level. I hope out day the next story could live up to this expectation or, better yet, surpass it if only a little.

After Winter Came Spring

Chapter:1

May 23, 2024

To:Bubbles

Woah this a very long review! First, thank you for giving my past entry a try!

Actually, I still struggle to write clearly that's why if you've noticed in Musubi and on my other stories, there's a bunch of confusing things happening around. It might vary from each person, but despite having a lot of flaws, I'm happy the story got criticism and recognition from everyone! I swear it made perfect sense to me when I submitted it... not now though. I could point out some things I needed to change but on how to change those, I'm not sure yet. Rude as it was for the other contestants, I intended this to be a tribute first and an entry second so there's also a matter of balance I needed to consider.

Again, thanks for sharing your thoughts!

After Winter Came Spring

Chapter:1

May 23, 2024

To:otkrlj

Thanks for reading! I'll try to edit but with the word limit, I can't promise anything! I still hoped you enjoyed the story despite the flaws.😀

After Winter Came Spring

Chapter:1

Mar 17, 2024

Isaac really did have a Light Yagami moment here. He's literally Charon for a week yet he didn't even pick up some item to defend himself in case things go south. Better luck in the afterlife Isaac.

Anyway, thanks for the team for making this short mystery! It's been fun binging it! Any chance you get together again for another episode?😍

Charon's Legacy: The Clockwork Oracle

Chapter:7

Mar 17, 2024

Since there's nothing to support the others, it's pretty much Isaac at this point. Being inconsistent with his fear and lying about the scroll. Still, I feel there's a last minute plot twist waiting to happen.

Charon's Legacy: The Clockwork Oracle

Chapter:5

Mar 17, 2024

I'm starting to think Charon himself did it. I mean all the maids actions were too suspicious. Last time they're keen on keeping Savio on one spot and now the cleaning one said she didn't ever see the cellar door open. I mean, she's there to clean! If there's a word from the butler for the schedules/shifts for tasks in the next chapters then I'm still going by Charon being the culprit here.

Also, as Levia pointed out, Isaac being ok with blood? I mean, for some reason the blood here was still pooling so it's still fresh, might be another magic item at play here, but earlier he couldn't even look at the sword with dried blood in it! Maybe he and Charon were in it? The plot thickens.

Charon's Legacy: The Clockwork Oracle

Chapter:4

Mar 17, 2024

Good thing the oracle didn't give a definite answer (as expected). I find it surprising Savio asked that question when he could've asked for anything else...like a way to ask unlimited questions >.<

So far, so good!

Charon's Legacy: The Clockwork Oracle

Chapter:2

Oct 18, 2023

To:IncognitoMe

Thank you for the confidence boost (⁎ᴗ͈ ⩊ ᴗ͈⁎) I really find it hard to portray the vision I have in my head due to the tight word count and my limited ability. I'll try to do better keeping your pointers in mind😁

Shinki

Chapter:1

Sep 01, 2023

Binging the whole story worked well for me. There's clearly inspiration from Makoto Shinkai(or any equivalent which I'm not aware of) from the emphasis on scenery/aesthetic. The story moved slow in the beginning, as expected for an SoL, but I'm glad it picked up intensity near the end. Bittersweet might be a good word I could come up with from the feeling I felt reading.

The second half or their journey to Yai's hometown made me uncomfortable at times bc it's a dangerous world out there and two teenagers travelling without much cash to go on was really scary. I couldn't imagine myself putting on either of their shoes. The good part was that perhaps the power of love helped them land on safe places and people like old man Yuga.

As for the side characters, it's good they also got some spotlight and at the right timing too. It's always good to see them get some development.

On the Railway Wire

Chapter:27

Sep 01, 2023

To:Yoshino

Oh well, I'm still pretty satisfied eith how things turned out, but yeah, it could've taken a very different direction if magic was added. Still, I hope this doesn't diminsh the impact(if there's any).

Musubi

Chapter:9

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