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Saito Forester

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An introvert who appreciates the small joys of life.

registered at: May 11, 2022

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Jun 19, 2022

Very descriptive! 😁
I love the flow and pacing of the writing. 😊

One thing I will say from reading this chapter, I'm not quite sure what exactly is going on. From what I have gathered, Alejandro and Enne had a tarot card reading and they are going to fix something. I'm not sure about the purpose of the train incident but I am curious about where it will lead to. 🤔

The Melancholy of a Whimsical Half-Elph

Chapter:0

Jun 17, 2022

To:AWiddleStar

I feel that way when reading, like a majestic royal tune is playing in the background as I read, almost as if the characters are doing a waltz. 😁

I understand about the wording. For me, the words I want to convey sometimes come out differently or I'm at a loss of words. Haha.

The Wanderblood Princess and Sir Try Hard

Chapter:2

Jun 17, 2022

To:AWiddleStar

No problem at all! I will definitely continue to keep reading. Something about the story has me hooked. It's midnight for me and I'm awake reading your chapters, which is a huge win in my book. 😄

The Wanderblood Princess and Sir Try Hard

Chapter:1

Jun 17, 2022

I liked this chapter. I'd like to ask, how would you describe your writing style? 🤔
I'm trying to get a feel of the story progression.

In the previous chapter, I felt that the descriptions hindered the story progression a little. This chapter hinted at a few things I look forward to reading. 😁

The Wanderblood Princess and Sir Try Hard

Chapter:2

Jun 17, 2022

I like the descriptions, but it's getting in the way of the flow of the story.

Chiffon is an interesting character, a shortsighted princess who seems to want to rebel against a male chauvinist hierarchy or way of thinking. But it's buried under long descriptions.

I think if you bring out her thoughts, actions, and behavior more pair it against what she is against, she will truly shine as a character.

The Wanderblood Princess and Sir Try Hard

Chapter:1

Jun 15, 2022

To:epicene

Thank you for your response! I'm having a lot of fun writing this and am looking forward to posting new chapters! 😁

Et Cetera

Chapter:2

Jun 12, 2022

To:Momentie

Hmm...a toilet URO... 🤔

The Town Where the Wind Doesn't Blow: Welcome to Gossport City

Chapter:2

Jun 12, 2022

To:F.C Fondness

Thanks! I'm enjoying this approach and would recommend it if there's a lot going on in a story. 😄

The Town Where the Wind Doesn't Blow: Welcome to Gossport City

Chapter:2

Jun 10, 2022

I may not be Kazuma, but I find myself relating to his sentiments in those situations. 🤣

My Government-Issued Girlfriend Can't Be This Cute!

Chapter:1

Jun 09, 2022

To:znf

Thanks for the feedback. I will begin editing for grammatical errors. 😅

The Town Where the Wind Doesn't Blow: Welcome to Gossport City

Chapter:1

Jun 09, 2022

I'm loving the personality of the beautiful girl. I'm imagining the image of Komi from "Komi Can't Communicate" if she was actually talkative. 😆😄

My First and Last Kiss Was With You

Chapter:1

Jun 09, 2022

To:F.C Fondness

Thanks for the feedback!
Other chapters will end with hooks after the first chapter prologue. 😄
And thanks about the grammar critique. Sometimes my regional dialect gets in the way of how I type. 😅

The Town Where the Wind Doesn't Blow: Welcome to Gossport City

Chapter:1

Jun 07, 2022

To:Hungry Sheep

Rooting for ya! 😁

My First and Last Kiss Was With You

Chapter:0

Jun 07, 2022

Instant favorite! I love the line about one being able to find love and what could be lost in return. Looking forward to reading the other chapters! 😍

My First and Last Kiss Was With You

Chapter:0

Jun 06, 2022

I'm a bit confused. How was Dahlia ripped off?
Otherwise, great chapter and the story is beginning to develop! 😁

Have you happened to play a game named VA-11 Hall-A? Your story is giving me those vibes, and I like the tone of the scenery. 😎

Noa's Arc

Chapter:4

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