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He/They | Writer and Artist Writing "Pigeon on a Power Line" for the Mal X Honeyfeed 2023 Contest Finalist in the 2022 Contest with, "Are You Real?" Pfp Art by Pit, @pawkaray on twitter
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Jun 07, 2022
To:znf
That's actually a pretty good point. I've decided to make the change you suggested accordingly. Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment! Good luck with your novel too!
Sharp, high-octane, and incredibly horny, this story definitely makes an impression haha~.
In terms of critique, I'd say that the characters have a fair bit of edge in their tone that risks crossing the line into being mean-spirited- I find myself looking forward to moments of levity to balance it out.
Jun 06, 2022
Very strong descriptive narration- the dynamic balance of action and diegetic storytelling is tightly-paced~
