Aug 30, 2023
Okay, this will probably be a long comment so please bear with me.
1. Let's start with the title. I like that the "With a Love Sorceress" archetype returned, and I like that the final chapter has the same title as the novel itself. Just look at my Fantasia's final chapter title, you'll see how much I like it. xD
2. Watching Mia and Toren was a nice touch, thank you for including that! But to be honest? I haven't missed them even once. I was just too happy to read about Clarisa. :P Sorry not sorry~ ... Also, was the tight word count the reason why you haven't shown us Amamiya and the earth Toren? I was kinda expecting to see how she buys him that lunch.
3. Is the "true ending" something that I should imagine as a post-credit scene? Because I think this is a brilliant idea and forgive me but I might take some inspiration and do this for my novel as well!
4. The ending between Jun and Claire made me emotional, my eyes were getting a little wet. But as a manly man, I didn't allow the tears to flow!! 😤It seems everybody got the happy ending and I couldn't have asked for more. I was thinking the whole time that Claire's punishment would be that she loses her magic, immortality and becomes a regular human along with Jun and they live happily ever after on Earth together. But your ending is much better, so I am glad you subverted my expectations! Was this ending the one you had planned out since the beginning or was there something else in your mind?
5. I am very glad you found me, which led me to read your novel. This was a great journey and I marveled at your writing skills over and over again (besides that one little criticism I had 😝). The wholesome romance aspect of this cannot be denied. The plot was linear and enjoyable, though I enjoyed the second half (or the third part) of the story much more, when Claire came into focus. Your characters are all well written with distinct personalities, but my only World Champion is the World Breaking Love Sorceress, she's just such a well written character that I can't help but to love her (and secretly want to marry her). Jun, though annoying, is a protagonist that is needed for this story. I read your author's note and I don't think you have to change anything about him. An annoying character doesn't mean a bad character. Toren and Mia, although not so memorable, are still a good pair. I don't know, I kinda wanted Toren to go full beast mode and take on a big bad near the end of the story or something. xD But I understand this wasn't about that. And no, I am not even into fights that much, it would just be cool for my little boyish me to see a beast-like, otherwordly fight in a romance novel in which I wouldn't have expected it. All in all, I think the result is great!
6. And last note from a fellow author, I am just very, VERY glad that we are not competing against each other in the same genre, because you are going to sweep this competition! I mean, yeah, there's my Level Up at Love School novel rivaling yours, but my bet is on Fantasia Is Not Ugly!, so hopefully we both win! 😌🤭
So... congratulations on finishing this piece of fiction, well done!
