Aug 29, 2023
I can imagine that you were debating with yourself, whether to name the chapters "Without a Love Sorceress, I Will Refuse Fate" or just "I Will Refuse Fate". Were you? And why did you decide to go with the latter? Just curious.
But let's analyze it properly. After all those titles, now the first part of the title is missing. And it just feels unsettling inside. I can't help it but feel incomplete when I look at the titles of these chapters. So that's probably how we are supposed to feel, right? We are supposed to feel the same emptiness like Jun without Claire. If that's what you were going for, I applaud you!
But I think I have the first criticism towards your writing choice. 👀I am not buying Claire's message at all. After everything she went through and how she tried to push him away so that he can have a normal life without that sad ending, why did she tell him what to do so easily? Just a single note saying "If you want, break the pendant, you'll see me again, easy-peasy haha." And also, I am not sure how I feel about him not figuring it out himself or doing it accidentally and therefore he could have blamed it on fate that they had to meet again... but maybe it will be explained further and maybe I won't feel like this anymore, so I'm giving you a benefit of a doubt until I finish your novel :P
