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Jun 10, 2023

Once again, I love their interaction. It's so entertaining and feels so believable. Can't wait to read how their arcade date goes.

My 2D Idol Is My 3D Girlfriend

Chapter:4

Jun 09, 2023

At times you slip back to 3rd person, going "his" this and that. might want to double-check before you post a chapter.

Very nice. I like the feeling of realism in this one, the interaction all feels very natural to me. I also like the patient pacing, no "love at first sight" or strange events that bring the couple very close very fast.

My 2D Idol Is My 3D Girlfriend

Chapter:3

Jun 09, 2023

Never really watched a Vtuber, don't really get the appeal of it, but I like the story so far.

My 2D Idol Is My 3D Girlfriend

Chapter:2

Jun 09, 2023

A very nice start. I like your writing style, it's clear and properly paced. The dialogue and character interaction in general feels a lot more realistic than that of most other entries I've read so far.

My 2D Idol Is My 3D Girlfriend

Chapter:1

Jun 09, 2023

Nice. I like the dialogue. She seems to be a bit on the unfriendly and overly serious side, not someone who would normally get along with the MC's type, so I wonder how they're going to get closer after this.

Winning a Swan in a Crane Game

Chapter:2

Jun 09, 2023

To:Trippy (トリッピー)

I mean, does you MC not have any family or friends he cares about? Being isekai'd usually means never seeing anyone from your original world again (though there are plenty of exceptions, this doesn't look like one of them), so realistically thinking, only someone with no emotional attachments to anyone on Earth would take getting isekai'd without any stress.

Reincarnated as the Least Popular Male Lead of an Otome Game, it’s Up to Me to Save the Villainess!

Chapter:1

Jun 08, 2023

Eh... A little better. I appreciate the moments of comedy, but the undertone is still damn depressing. I hope it doesn't take the whole story for someone to rip open his festering wounds, clean them up properly and bind them so that he can start properly healing. While it might make a nice dramatic climax for the story, I don't want to read an entire story with him in this state.

My Grandma's Loving Maid Is My Classroom Neighbor?!

Chapter:1

Jun 08, 2023

Quite a depressing start. Well written, though. But I do hope interaction with the FL and the grandma will drag him out of the emotional slump quickly.

Not sure what to make of the hallucination. Felt way too real and long in duration to be just tiredness, I fear the MC may have some serious mental health problems besides just depression.

My Grandma's Loving Maid Is My Classroom Neighbor?!

Chapter:0

Jun 07, 2023

Well...

If the previous chapter gave me a laugh, this one gave me several. 🤣

The clueless hero is a riot, and the sit com about the friends who misunderstand his intentions about the demon queen was quite hilarious as well.

Can't wait to read more.

I Was Supposed to Kill the Demon Lord, But Instead I Asked Her to Marry Me

Chapter:2

Jun 07, 2023

LMAO! 😂 Congrats, this is the first contest entry I've read that actually made me laugh out loud. I can't imagine why the MC would think that blurting that out without any premise would work, but it was certainly funny.

I like the way you made some effort to cover possible plot holes, like "why didn't they do this or that rather than sending the MC alone on a kamikaze mission?"

I Was Supposed to Kill the Demon Lord, But Instead I Asked Her to Marry Me

Chapter:1

Jun 07, 2023

Love the title. It's such a classic Japanese light novel title that explains the premise without need for any summary, lol.

It's a bit short, but it works well as a prologue. I'll be moving right on to the next chapter, so I can have something of substance to say.

I Was Supposed to Kill the Demon Lord, But Instead I Asked Her to Marry Me

Chapter:0

Jun 07, 2023

To:Krozam

Oh, I just realised what was bothering me somewhere in my subconscious: The MC's reaction about being isekai'd is kinda... lacking? Like, he doesn't have one at all. It's like he doesn't care at all. It's rather strange.

Reincarnated as the Least Popular Male Lead of an Otome Game, it’s Up to Me to Save the Villainess!

Chapter:1

Jun 07, 2023

The pacing is perhaps just a little bit too fast for my liking, but nothing that seriously bothers me. Otherwise, I'm liking this so far. You've successfully got my interest.

I like a well-balanced tsundere. The tsun makes the moments of dere more special. But that's assuming the tsun isn't so overpowering as to make her annoying.

Reincarnated as the Least Popular Male Lead of an Otome Game, it’s Up to Me to Save the Villainess!

Chapter:3

Jun 07, 2023

Ooh, horned rabbits. Classic.

The MC seems a bit... reckless. Instead of waiting for another chance with a better plan, he rushed to smear himself in poison.

Jumped from lvl 2 to 14. Wow. That's a massive amount of exp from just two common monsters.

So far, I'm enjoying this.

Reincarnated as the Least Popular Male Lead of an Otome Game, it’s Up to Me to Save the Villainess!

Chapter:2

Jun 07, 2023

Good start. Good writing, comfortable pacing and unlike some other contest entries I've checked out, I didn't feel the least bit lost at any point during this first chapter.

I'm not an expert on the genre, but I've read a few novels with similar premises. The knowledge of the genre tropes led me to feeling right at home from the start. I only hope that the story will have some original elements to distinguish itself from the other novels I've read... Though I'm not too concerned about clichés and whatnot, it's always nice to see some original thought put into a story.

Reincarnated as the Least Popular Male Lead of an Otome Game, it’s Up to Me to Save the Villainess!

Chapter:1

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