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Jun 13, 2023

To:Netoeu

While you're at it, might want to edit the story title as well. The lack of proper capitalization in the title is sometimes a sign of poor grammar in the story (not in this case, though), and may turn away some people.

My 2D Idol Is My 3D Girlfriend

Chapter:6

Jun 13, 2023

Better now after the edit. 👍

My 2D Idol Is My 3D Girlfriend

Chapter:5

Jun 12, 2023

Hilarious, as always. 😂 This MC is spectacularly dumb, which usually annoys me, but in this case it just works.

I Was Supposed to Kill the Demon Lord, But Instead I Asked Her to Marry Me

Chapter:3

Jun 12, 2023

Brilliant dialogue, as always.

Looks like there's a chance of a side couple forming. I love side couples, it's a chance to show the charm of other (mainly female) characters without making the story a harem.

Keep it up. I'm gonna recommend your story in the Discord, it deserves it. Honestly, out of all the contest entries I've checked out so far (not that there are a lot of them), yours is my favourite so far.

My 2D Idol Is My 3D Girlfriend

Chapter:6

Jun 12, 2023

I don't think I fully understood that... Like, what was that "Hiya" and how did that settle the matter? 🤔

My 2D Idol Is My 3D Girlfriend

Chapter:5

Jun 11, 2023

To:Kitsune

As I've tried to make clear, mystics are pretty OP in this world. One can turn the course of an entire war. It wasn't easy for Gundabad to get these items in his hands, but it's not unusual for senior mystics to have a few potent items that can be used as sacrifices.

The Youngest Court Mystic And the Mischievous Twin Princesses

Chapter:2

Jun 10, 2023

To:Shulox

Thank you very much for reading and for the advice. I'll do my best not to make this repetitive or boring. 😄

Since the twins and the MC are already very well acquainted in present time and only a step away from romance, I'll include lots of flashbacks to their past, alongside present time events, in order to show how they got so close.

The Youngest Court Mystic And the Mischievous Twin Princesses

Chapter:0

Jun 10, 2023

To:Christian Widjaya

I do try to split wherever possible, but I can't really do it arbitrarily, there needs to be a clear change of subject. 🤔 Well, I'll try to pay more attention to this. Anyway, it should get easier to read when I get to dialogue-heavy parts of the story without so much pure exposition.

Thanks for reading and commenting!

The Youngest Court Mystic And the Mischievous Twin Princesses

Chapter:1

Jun 10, 2023

To:Kitsune

Yes, I figured that I should place this part of the story quite early, to explain how this is isekai. The downside is that it delays getting into the slice of life / romance stuff, but we'll get to that as soon as this three-part chapter is over.

I'm glad you enjoyed the exposition. I have a bad habit of getting too much into world-building, particularly when it comes to magic systems, so I was worried I got too infodump-y. I still worry about the next chapter, because it contains more of this stuff... 😅

As always, thanks for reading!

The Youngest Court Mystic And the Mischievous Twin Princesses

Chapter:1

Jun 10, 2023

To:Kitsune

Thank you! I hope you'll enjoy the whole story to come.

The Youngest Court Mystic And the Mischievous Twin Princesses

Chapter:0

Jun 10, 2023

Once again, I love their interaction. It's so entertaining and feels so believable. Can't wait to read how their arcade date goes.

My 2D Idol Is My 3D Girlfriend

Chapter:4

Jun 09, 2023

At times you slip back to 3rd person, going "his" this and that. might want to double-check before you post a chapter.

Very nice. I like the feeling of realism in this one, the interaction all feels very natural to me. I also like the patient pacing, no "love at first sight" or strange events that bring the couple very close very fast.

My 2D Idol Is My 3D Girlfriend

Chapter:3

Jun 09, 2023

Never really watched a Vtuber, don't really get the appeal of it, but I like the story so far.

My 2D Idol Is My 3D Girlfriend

Chapter:2

Jun 09, 2023

A very nice start. I like your writing style, it's clear and properly paced. The dialogue and character interaction in general feels a lot more realistic than that of most other entries I've read so far.

My 2D Idol Is My 3D Girlfriend

Chapter:1

Jun 09, 2023

Nice. I like the dialogue. She seems to be a bit on the unfriendly and overly serious side, not someone who would normally get along with the MC's type, so I wonder how they're going to get closer after this.

Winning a Swan in a Crane Game

Chapter:2

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