Jul 08, 2023
Hmm, there were a few sudden moments there.
Firstly, the first scene ended to suddenly. I think you could add more in the reveal of Chizuru being the stalker, add more surprise effect and what not, as it is a a reveal of something that has been building up in the past chapters.
Likewise with Chizuru's turning point. It's seems to be an important turning point so I think you could add a bit more emphasis there.
Also, it says that Chizuru was "about to" cross the road. So she has not cross the rod. It wouldn't make sense if they suddenly end up in the middle of the road.
Interested to read what happens next though.