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Feb 04, 2026

Another good chapter but first off I think some things like the characters power levels growing faster than their age should be shown and not told, like we could have had a scene where we see Alexander training with the others and we see him practically beating them and the kids will shrug it off as Alexander has always been stronger but Micheal and Raphael who were looking at them from afar would then have had the conversation about Alexander power level increasing more than it should for his age.

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The New Testament: Morningstar

Chapter:2

Feb 04, 2026

Now this, this looks visually better than the first chapter

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The New Testament: Morningstar

Chapter:2

Feb 04, 2026

Also since you're going for a novel script performance hybrid I think you should put their names in all caps or bolden them before you put their action or facial expressions in the bracket, something like

HEPHAESTUS: (***)

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The New Testament: Morningstar

Chapter:1

Feb 04, 2026

To:Infinite_the_black

I see, although I still feel like the work would gain a lot of you leave a one like gap to signify paragraphs, right now the stuff looks a bit jumbled together makes it less appealing from the eyes. Other than that peak story, I haven't even read far and I'm already wandering who the mother to Lucifer's children are🤣

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The New Testament: Morningstar

Chapter:1

Feb 03, 2026

To:Anime lover

Then again,judging from the comment your use of punctuations when typing are better than mine by far, I literally need someone to help me edit my draft to fix punctuations and spelling errors plus there's the fact I do have the feeling that I may have over jumped in the later arc

Final Chapter: POST FUTURE SAGA

Chapter:0

Feb 03, 2026

To:Alison Goreman

Wow, I didn't even know people read the novel😅, most people stopped commenting after the prologue, well except for one guy. I personally don't think I've reached the level to be asking for advice and tips but if I was to give one I'd say just let your imagination take the front seat, write what you wanna write and make it as close to how you saw it in your imagination and just enjoy what you're writing , yeah that basically it. Thanks for reading my novel by the way, still surprised people actually do read it 😅. Anyways, have a good day😁

Final Chapter: POST FUTURE SAGA

Chapter:0

Jan 31, 2026

To:Mario Nakano 64

Nah, just keep on reading till the end of the future arc and it will hopefully make sense but for now keep on mind all this happens long after the events of the current timeline cause Hanz comes from this time like this current time and damn time travel is kinda hard to explain🤣

Final Chapter: POST FUTURE SAGA

Chapter:34

Jan 31, 2026

To:Anime lover

So yh Hanz is from the future all this takes place and ends up being why he comes back to the past in the first place

Final Chapter: POST FUTURE SAGA

Chapter:34

Jan 31, 2026

To:Mario Nakano 64

I guess I'm really bad at portraying it, well I'll work on that in the rewrite😅, basically from life of Hanz down is happening in the future

Final Chapter: POST FUTURE SAGA

Chapter:34

Jan 23, 2026

To:Mario Nakano 64

Alright then, I'll keep that in mind

Final Chapter: POST FUTURE SAGA

Chapter:21

Jan 23, 2026

To:Mario Nakano 64

Nah, it's a character you aren't going to see till chapter thirty

Final Chapter: POST FUTURE SAGA

Chapter:20

Jan 23, 2026

To:Mario Nakano 64

Oh yup in that case it's gonna be revealed in his back story

Final Chapter: POST FUTURE SAGA

Chapter:13

Jan 23, 2026

To:Mario Nakano 64

Low-key just realizing I've made a plot hole after reading this chapter, I knew this was bound to happen😅 I just hope people don't notice though. Well when I'm done with the novel and I revamp it I'll fix the issue

Final Chapter: POST FUTURE SAGA

Chapter:15

Jan 23, 2026

To:Mario Nakano 64

How does it confuse you though, do tell let me see if it's an issue with my story telling or what I intentionally did😂

Final Chapter: POST FUTURE SAGA

Chapter:13

Jan 23, 2026

To:Mario Nakano 64

How so😂 if it's the way I'm thinking then don't worry Hanz back story is explained In The future saga and it will make sense then😂

Final Chapter: POST FUTURE SAGA

Chapter:13