Jun 19, 2022

This was a breeze to read through, and not just because it was a short prologue! I have a soft spot for characters who have a chip on their shoulder, and I suspect Shannon Grey will be a good character in that regard. I think one of the things I look forward to, aside from the development of the characters, is how you will unravel the mysticism surrounding kung fu. What is exaggeration, and what is ultimately truth? I look forward to reading more, Jio!

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Jun 18, 2022

To:Feyblue

Thanks for commenting!

I was actually a little worried that the premise would be too weird to get any attention, but I guess I should keep writing, haha.

And you’re probably right about the fight scene. The first two chapters were written before I entered the contest, and the fight was written as an interesting way to introduce Erina, but I couldn’t really come up with anything. No excuses, of course! Thanks for the feedback.

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