Jan 12, 2025
To:lolitroy
Sorry if I overloaded you on discord, i kind of burnt out on writing in the final strerch and felt exhausted afterwards. So when i heard that you so intensly disliked the last few chapters and told me that i should write it again or heavily edit to be good it kind of messed me up, i didnt have the stamina to go back at it again. Plus i was so sure and proud of it but you do make very valid points.
The criticism i took to heart, in fact the point that the story is very tell-y was the exact word my gf told me when she was proofreading and beta reading. You were also correct to point out the missing reactions of the rest of the crew on the confession and after trial, so i added a few brief lines of dialogue pre trial and a new scene post trial to give at least some more reactions, it was something i did feel was a real miss after your critiques and a reread. I would add and change more but i cant stand to look at microsoft word anymore, at least for a month 😂
I also am a big lover of pulpy 80s anything and as you say modern sci fi philosophical yaps so i wanted to merge the two
an unusual merge
I am happy you enjoyed the story despite its shortcomings, and yes i am still very much a beginner😁, i think you gave me a lot to work with for future projects and i am determined to keep pushing and improve
Thank you for always reading and the honest, detailed review and analysis, sincirely 
Utlimately as a writer, you cant improve if you dont listen to what doesnt work and I am glad I was able to get your feedback
(P.S. dont nuke honduras🇭🇳)
