Oct 15, 2026
This was really good story, i enjoyed it a lot
I don't think i have any more feedback than i mentioned already which mostly come to lack of tags, except this i could probably nitpick on few things but nothing big enough to spoil this story
What was not very clear was why they needed those records from Cedric? They wanted to have a proof to show that the crown is bad but to convince who? Sure this makes perfect sense but the stakes for getting this proof weren't clearly stated
But i am not sure how big issue this was. You wrote very action focused story while i like to dwell on intrigues and politics so it could be just me feeling like this
This story was very focused on Leon and followed him really closely without panning out into bigger perspective.If this was your stylistic choice i am fine with it and can understand why you only mentioned things that Leon would be concerned about. So again it may be just me who would like to have some bigger perspective on this conflict and this world in general
So overall it was really good story, you are really good at pacing and keeping tension and your scenes are well written.Sharp dialogues and fight scenes definitely shine here