Nov 24, 2025
I have things to say.
So, on a purely personal level, I actually don't jive with what's going on at all. Call me old-fashioned, but the idea of such an intimate act being done publicly with the crowd doing their own stuff rubs me in many wrong ways (no harm in rubbing against one another, eh?). But hey, it's a different world, I guess.
And yet, despite this... it's my favorite chapter (next to Unbroken). It is incredibly written. The descriptions are the most vivid so far, I quite literally hear the song in my head, and the lyrics are the most "sing-alongable" lyrics of the entire story. Everything between Sayane and Azag has that hot-and-heavy, short of breath and almost tearing up vibe you really have to know to be able to write well. Their interactions here made me feel something in my heart, and literally no erotic fiction or horny chapter has done this to me ever.
It's clear this was your favorite chapter to write (is my theory about you basing the entire story around it proving itself true, eh, eh?). It REALLY immersed me in the world, even beyond what what the previous chapters did.
Between Unbroken and this, I really cannot pick a favorite chapter. Both make this story immortal and worthy of countless rereads, so I'll say: why not both?