Aug 09, 2026
It's interesting that Freydis seems like the Red Bear. This reveal, however, feels a little cheap seeing as it's both set up and delivered in the span of 1,000 words. I feel like the beginning does a good job of setting up the atmosphere, but it suffers from a bit of a grounding issue. I understand you're trying to show not tell, but that's usually okay to do in the opening paragraphs if only to allow the reader some hooks to interpret the world. Sure I understand the gist of it, a company of soldiers has been sent to the far north to kill this mystical bear, but I don't know much about their origin or the specifics of their missions. As a result, a lot of the exposition delivered via dialogue falls a bit flat. Still, the reveal at the end is enough to hook a reader, so you got that going for you which is nice.