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Nov 27, 2025

The BL vibes in this chapter are super strong.

Ash and Silk ~灰と絹~

Chapter:4

Nov 27, 2025

I feel like this start is a little clumsy. I can appreciate not giving the game away too early, but it would really help if you grounded Kaoru a little more. Intriguing as his actions might be, they are never framed with any amount of reflection, nor do we get any preliminary character traits out of him. The narration is forward-only, meaning that all we have to glean who Kaoru is are his hitherto underexplained motives, the one instance of him wooing someone? (The sequence was not too clearly written.), and the singular moment where he says that he'd never been a patient man.

At the same time, whilst I can appreciate the atmosphere you were going for, I think the prose takes me out of it. You describe things very technically: 'A sound like...', 'A voice like...' and the grammatical rigour you maintain through scenes with varying vibes makes them read quite similarly. I don't really get any sense of dread or anxiety from Kaoru when the 'owner' appears. The words tell me he's scared, but the sentences don't help.

Ash and Silk ~灰と絹~

Chapter:1

Nov 27, 2025

This piece is extremely dense, mostly because of the overabundance of needlessly thorough description. The more details you specify about anything, as paradoxically as it might sound, the less the reader will be able to envision it. You spent a whole paragraph describing a *sword*. As important as it may be, we do not need to understand the exact angle and point at which it curves. Less is more.

Tokusatsu Otaku Dragon Sword Waifu

Chapter:0

Nov 27, 2025

This is so not daijoubu(okay.)

Reverie of the Electric City

Chapter:1

Nov 20, 2025

Begging for this to be yuri.

Touch of the Tainted

Chapter:0

Nov 19, 2025

This is all cool and all, but so far we've had 3 chapters of combat that didn't exactly have a purpose or any narrative weight to it. *Why* do we want to see these people fighting, other than them being protagonists? What makes them special on a personal level? Why should I be invested in the consequence of a fight that feels quite one-sided?

The Blessing of Diva: Resonance Zero

Chapter:2

Nov 19, 2025

Why is this written like a screenplay? You're writing a book not directing a film.

The Blessing of Diva: Resonance Zero

Chapter:0

Nov 19, 2025

Motherfucker straight up Tenki no Ko'd this.

Science Makes No Sense

Chapter:1

Nov 10, 2025

Wild to think this is the ending.