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Nov 07, 2025

Some of these chapters feel quite oddly trimmed. I'm not saying they all ought to end in cliffhangers, but sometimes I can't help wondering if you just structured this as a bigger chapter comprising multiple scenes and you just fit as many of those as you could in the 1-2k range.

>FORBIDDIC< I Got Reincarnated Into A World Where I Was Forbidden From Learning About Magic But I Will Persist

Chapter:11

Nov 07, 2025

Y'know, I'm kinda wondering where the fact that this guy has been isekai'd comes in. If I omit the bit at the beginning which provides us with the necessary context that Hikaru died, this reads like a classic YA fantasy with LN prose.

>FORBIDDIC< I Got Reincarnated Into A World Where I Was Forbidden From Learning About Magic But I Will Persist

Chapter:9

Nov 06, 2025

To:Lucy

Y'know, I was gonna let this slide, but now that you said stuff like "I wrote this only for you," I couldn't help it.

I couldn't help noticing a marked departure from the writing style of your earlier chapters starting here. And whilst that baffled me at first, seeing how consistent, rigid and, most importantly of all, soulless the writing has become after this point (I did read a couple more chapters just to confirm my doubts) it has become blatantly apparent to me that this chapter in particular has either been written or polished with the help of AI. Otherwise I can't explain how your tight writing has suddenly become bloated, why em-dashes suddenly abound, and why the otherwise fairly coherent narrative now feels jerky and unfocused.

I'm happy I could motivate you, though. You do have some good writing chops on you. I just wish you'd used them to the fullest extent rather than taking the easy out. I'd also be happy to be proven wrong, but I am fairly certain there is no way for you to do that.

Good day.

A True Hero's form

Chapter:17

Nov 04, 2025

Swear to god if you're not the least bit trans I'll eat my shoe.

Warning: This SpellBook Was Human!

Chapter:10

Nov 01, 2025

I am lowkey confused by this chapter. Not two paragraphs ago, Lian just lied about his power. Then he did... I'll be honest, I have no clue what he did to that demon, or why the three of them were even here to begin with. Then he's suddenly fine revealing it to the world?

Also, I feel like for the past couple of chapters you've really started ditching the setup phase of your chapters. In the earlier, and I assume, more polished chapters, there was a distinct ebb into the narrative, silly and sudden as it might've been. But now, it feels like I'm just jerked into it like the reverse of waking from a nightmare.

A True Hero's form

Chapter:17

Nov 01, 2025

Are you... typing the chapters as Discord messages to yourself...? Why is the italics formatting the same as Discord's (or well, any) markdown...

Also banger power. He is now Anya, nod nod.

A True Hero's form

Chapter:16

Nov 01, 2025

Ngl, this felt like a scene introduced here just for the sake of the rule of threes. I get it's meant to be funny, but it also feels kind of inconsequential with it being this short *and* effortless.

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Chapter:15

Nov 01, 2025

Kiiinda weird for the narrator to introduce Morwen by her first name to the reader, whilst she introduces herself to the perspective characters at a later time.

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Chapter:14

Nov 01, 2025

And the chapter ended there.

Squeezing it out of you.

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Chapter:13

Nov 01, 2025

Man's gift is a +2 on every perception check.

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Chapter:11

Nov 01, 2025

Some banging bars in here. Neither of you is wrong enough to be right alone. Cold.

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Chapter:10

Nov 01, 2025

Hmm. Interesting POV change. We've only been following Lian so far, but it looks like we're dipping a little into Kael too.

Another thing I feel is a little odd here, though the brisk and earnest quality of the writing masks it more often than not, is how I feel like we're skipping a bit of the connective tissue between the characters. For example, Mira and Kael had known each other for a total of 4 chapters and, what, just as many days at this point? So for Kael to so readily say something like 'you don't usually do X' makes it feel like something's been cut from the narrative or it's been noted in such a blink-and-you'll-miss-it way that I did just that.

A True Hero's form

Chapter:9

Nov 01, 2025

Another cute moment. Love the little interactions these 3 goobers have so much.

That being said, I'm a little bit confused about something: the beginning set up a promise for some kind of conventional plot. But so far, 8 chapters in and we've kinda been gallivanting around...

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Chapter:8

Nov 01, 2025

Banger chapter. I love how we've only met the benign, even if arrogant kind of heroes, or our kind-hearted protagonists. But here we actually get to see how big of an asshole a 'true' hero is. Good job Luce~

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Chapter:7

Nov 01, 2025

Tbh, I get this is an isekai, and a shounen, and a bit of an unserious moment, but Lian lapsing into a cheesy inner monologue said out loud kinda took me out a little. I feel like if it had been a little shorter and/or less of it was actually spoken, it would've hit a little better.

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Chapter:6

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