Feb 21, 2026
I really love the vibe it is interesting and makes me wanna know more, a nice horror story!
But I would reccomend not using the same words to much or start sentences in the same way again.
Also , a very hard thing to master, is the Show dont Tell rule— you mostly describe what she is feeling and doing, but instead of telling us you could describe the way her body acts like sweating, shivering or her spine freezing, if she is doing something describe how she does it and make the atmosphere become real.
Keep writing your story!! :D