Dec 11, 2021
To:Momentie
Thank you for your thoughtful comment! I always welcome any questions or critiques you have and you do have a point!
As stated in my other comment I didn’t revise my first few chapters so I do consider this and the next one my weakest from all, which is understandably upsetting for myself and my readers. I believe a friend actually told me about the corridor/hallway and how they also had a hard time visualizing it, so I really appreciate your feedback on where to also focus on describing!
Will also mention that the story will remain disorienting as Dolly and the third person limited aren’t reliable. So while I wanted the first few chapters to remain confusing I believe I might have left out too much detail that it becomes hard to visualize, my apologies!
Hopefully the plot twists that come later down the line will explain some of the questions you might have and I hope you look forward to them ^u^ TYSM for your time again I appreciate it <3
