Sep 07, 2021

Aaaaaaaaaaaaah! WHY?? WHY DO THIS?!

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Sep 07, 2021

Wow this was a great chapter. Finally we will get to know what happened to him. It's time for max binge!

I again noticed some problem with the change in tenses like you are changing between past and present tense at times... there were a few other minor errors. I suggest you go through it again and fix them.

Sorry I'm being too blunt. It's just my nature when it comes to these things...

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Sep 07, 2021

Idek what to say at this point. This is just soo good is all...
Currently at the brink of sadness cuz of irl things and chapter 19 lol. So my comments may be a bit... less wordy...

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Sep 06, 2021

wtf is that fking woman. I just- why do this???
It was so damn unexpected it pissed me off.. Now I actually can't hate him... I would act the same way if I were in that position. I am crying... great job...

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Sep 06, 2021

OMG imagine if Mikejima meant that part as an external irl confession thing! Now I ship them too. That end. THAT was awesome! And to add, once or twice, I noticed you switching tenses. Past to present tense and things. So please review and edit it later. It's an awesome chapter overall tho!

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Sep 06, 2021

omg, I cri! I Hope Makejima gets over his fear soon...

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Sep 06, 2021

Lol, this chapter made me laugh a lot. The scene when she was about to die and Makejima's trash-talking the game! Onto the next one... later.

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Sep 06, 2021

The change! He changed!!! Into a shy (maybe) scared (definitely) cute boi!!!!! Time to binge the next one!

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Sep 05, 2021

Afraid? Of women? Sounds like even the least relatable character (in my perspective atleeast) has something I can relate to... Many girls and women I've met are... Intimidating for some reason.

But damn I still angry at him! He insulted my girl Hikari like that. But hope nothing bad happens to him. Want to see his character development if any.

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Sep 04, 2021

Ayy Mashirooo! I like the niceness and damn I'm crying a lot now

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Sep 04, 2021

Finally I have the time to read. And what is going on??? Will kurokawa..

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Sep 03, 2021

Ayy an amazing chapter. Just a small error. It's "... sitting on one of the branches of the tree." And not just "branch"

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Jul 27, 2021

The chapter was interesting. Dolly and Noah were badass. And the mosters are yandere kids which is good.

The things said about the world divided into realms with different things inside was amazing I'm interested in knowing more and can't wait. Noah reminded me of a shota with a childish personality.

Keep up the good work

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Jul 27, 2021

Damn a great start. I could easily imagine what I was reading. Meaning your writing was damn good. On to the next one!

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Jul 26, 2021

To:rinka_desuu

Aye! You know I will.

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