Jul 18, 2021
You have succeeded in making me cry again. Good job! It seems like the mood you wanted to bring with this story is reaching the readers (well me at least)
Lol anyways, there are some places in the chapter where I feel like the punctuations are incorrectly used. Like there are commas and colons where I feel like there shouldn't be. Ofc it's just a feeling. But just check it out.
Anyways I love how well written the lines are, well spaced out paras and well written scenes and dialogues. Keep it up. Can't wait for the next one!